Image Interpritation

The first image shown in class is in the shape of a seagull. However, the inside of the seagull is painted to look like it has been pieced together by different materials. While looking at this image I am instantly reminded of the beach. With the different colored and different textured pieces filling the inside of the seagull are very bright and vibrant. I believe the painter of this image is trying to portray a happy and sunny day at the beach. Their use of color and texture is easy on the viewer's eyes giving off the feeling of calmness. The bird's posture gives us the idea that the bird is not agitated witch also gives us the idea of peace. 


The second image shown in class is a magazine cover with no text other than the date. There is what seems to be a human jumping and preforming the splits in mid-air. The person appears to be wearing a tuxedo. I, as a viewer, feel a sense of happiness from the human jumping at the top of the page. The person is jumping and raising one hand in the air to possibly show his happiness. The creator of this image has kept it very simple.


The third image there is a vulture watching a small boy who is suffering from starvation. The boy is obviously starting due to his easily visible bone structure. He is hunched over almost in the fetal position. The vulture is waiting for the young boy to die so that it can eat what is left of the child. The image has a strong tale of how the strong pick on the weak. It also shows a level of selfishness because the vulture is only focused on what he needs to eat. This is translated into the human world every day. There are those who are powerful who are not helping those who are in desperate need of it.

Workshop Reflection

While reading my editor's comments I was thoroughly pleased. I was expecting the editor to tell me that I needed to transition my paragraphs better, but he said other wise. He stated the organization and transitions of the paragraphs were well done. However, he told me that my introduction paragraph needed more work. That I need to capture the reader's interest in the first paragraph, and this doesn't happen until later on. While reading my essay over I can completely see what he is taking about. I was also told to be more descriptive on my surrounding area during my experiences. I think this will add to my paper immensely, both in length and depth.  

Paper Workshop

Personally, I believe that I should work on my transitions between my paragraphs more. I feel like I jump around too much in my paper. I should put more into leading up to my story instead of jumping right into it. I think the editor of my essay will agree with my earlier points. They may also give me ideas on how to fix my transitions and inform me if there is enough content to the paper. Some questions I would ask them is if they have any problems with me jumping right into my story, or if I should include more background.

Writing Critique

• The title of the essay could have been more creative and inviting. Perhaps something to get the readers attention.
• The first sentence of the essay could have stared out by telling us, the readers, what the "experience" is, I feel like the reader is left guessing about what her experience is
• The first paragraph could be moved and/or used to strengthen the last paragraph.
• The second paragraph has the potential to be the introductory paragraph, since it introduces the reader to what her experience is that she will be talking about the rest of the story 
• I like that the writer did a good job at going into detail when describing her trip on the subway and talking about the people, the atmosphere and what she was feeling during her trip.
• She does a great job at expressing, in her writing, how she is feeling at different times throughout the story
• "As almost ninth graders often do, I thought I was independent and knew everything." there is a grammatical error here, causing this to be a run-on sentience 
• Starting a sentence, especially starting a paragraph, with "And" is a poor way to introduce a new idea or detail into the story
• The concluding paragraph did a good job of wrapping up the story, as well as leaving the reader with something to think about